01yz125

no it goes 45

nascarmaniac

45km per hour of MPH? Bouncing of the limiter in top gear it does more than 45kmph

Ben john

You are doing very well for your age. You most certainly have a talent for writing. However, you story is rather unrealistic on several counts, not least of all the way you describe "Hikari". I personally hate it when someone brags about how great the main character is. It makes me hope something horrible happens to her/him. No one can possibly empathize with a perfect person, and that makes your main character very cold and unsympathetic. Readers like to feel a similarity or some sort of common ground with the main character of a story. And the way people interact is put-on and corny. No one really acts like that. Realism is vital to the success of a story about real life.\


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